[原创]旧诗重提

清风雨荷

<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; <font size="3">《等待》<span lang="EN-US">&nbsp;</span></font></span></p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span lang="EN-US"><p><br/><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">常在村口 眺望,<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>过往的车辆与行人；<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>或在门口，翘首痴望<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>你的来访； </span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">而你，却不再出现<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span>在我等待的<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span>每一天、、、、、<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></span></p></span></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span lang="EN-US">&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></span><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span lang="EN-US"></span></span>&nbsp;</p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span lang="EN-US"><p style="TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN-LEFT: 262.5pt; TEXT-INDENT: 27pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify; mso-para-margin-left: 25.0gd; mso-char-indent-count: 1.5;"><font color="#333333">《咫尺天涯》 </font></p><p style="TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN-LEFT: 262.5pt; TEXT-INDENT: 27pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify; mso-para-margin-left: 25.0gd; mso-char-indent-count: 1.5;"><span lang="EN-US"><br/><font color="#333333">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</font></span><font color="#333333">心与心靠近，</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>再遥远的路程</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>也不是距离； </font></p><p style="TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN-LEFT: 262.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify;"><span lang="EN-US"><br/><font color="#333333">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</font></span><font color="#333333">心与心相印，</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>再高大的山脉</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>也不会成为障碍；</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>心与心相连，</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>再坚固的石头，<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></font></p><p style="TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN-LEFT: 262.5pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify;"><span lang="EN-US"><br/><font color="#333333">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</font></span><font color="#333333">也阻拦不住</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>如流水般源源不断的爱；</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>而心一旦离开了，</font><font color="#333333"><span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>咫尺也是天涯、、、、、、 </font></p><p style="TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; TEXT-ALIGN: justify; mso-char-indent-count: 1.0;"><font color="#333333">&nbsp; 《离愁》</font></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 34pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">背上行囊<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>背上浓浓的离愁别绪<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>忍不住停下<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>即将远行的脚步<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>蓦然回首<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<p></p></span></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><p><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">你是否会在我身后的<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>某个角落<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>目送我离去<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>是否会在心里默默地<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>祈盼我<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span>早日归来？<span lang="EN-US"><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></span></p></span><p>[em18]<font face="宋体" size="3">很久以前写的,权当是诗吧~ ,著位前辈请多指教.</font></p></span></span><p></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-4-20 20:21:30编辑过]

清风雨荷

<p>呵呵```</p><p>谢谢万绿听雨的鼓励.</p><p>&nbsp;</p>[em02]

清风雨荷

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;<span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"></p></span></p><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">《尘封的记忆》<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;">&nbsp;</p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">汛猛洪水，波涛在风雨中汹涌奔腾，<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">你笨拙地比划长长的竹篙，<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">本能地努力靠岸；<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">我在岸上狂奔，追随着小船忘了脚下深浅、、、、、、<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">风雨同舟 我们共同经历，<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">携手开垦 爱的路途，忘了一路艰辛；<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">再回首，<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">山与水见证我们拔涉的脚印；<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3">时间，拂不去岁月落下的尘埃。<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"></p><p></p><span style="COLOR: #333333; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; LETTER-SPACING: 1.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt;"><font size="3"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></span><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 180%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-margin-top-alt: auto; mso-margin-bottom-alt: auto;"></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-4-20 20:39:30编辑过]

万绿听雨

赏.赞.希望看到楼主更多作品.

爱之旋

<p>[em17][em17]</p><p>社区又多了位才女.</p><p>希望能看到楼主更多的作品.</p>

micaiyao

<p>希望有更多的才子佳人加入。踊跃发表原创作品，大家一起分享，一起学习，一起进步~</p><p>&nbsp;</p>[em02]

晨曦谷

楼主好才华...支持,加油..[em02]

梦牵和平

恩，不错！还望多来~[em02]

真想2

<p><font size="3">技巧不怎么样.</font></p><p><font size="3">不过写出了最真实的情感,带着乡村泥土芬芳的那一种,这是吾等惯于异想天开的人永远无法再抵达的一种境界.</font></p><p><font size="3">希望楼主继续努力,朴素的油菜花比起娇艳的玫瑰,价值尤显珍贵!</font></p>[em01]

micaiyao

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="COLOR: #222222; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">我觉得对于文章的点评很有意义,大家可以互相交流经验。很惭愧，我也特别希望向大家学习一下写诗的技巧，不知道真想</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #222222; FONT-FAMILY: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt;">2</span><span style="COLOR: #222222; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Tahoma; mso-hansi-font-family: Tahoma; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-bidi-font-family: Tahoma;">及各位前辈可否指点一二？</span></p>[em21][em18]